I was lucky to take a few workshops with the Oregon Poet Laureate Emeritus Paulann Petersen. She is amazing and gets the creative juices flowing. We were told to write a different way to describe things, being unique. I chose Whirlpool and Mist. We were to keep them short.
How did I do?
TO THE
WHIRLPOOL
Liquid
hurricane tickling across stones,
the
laughing, spinning, dizzy
Rollercoaster
for leaves and twigs,
a
merry-go-round for daring frogs.
TO MIST
A shroud
upon hillsides and mountains,
a painter
creating ghostly silhouettes of grand firs
in mottled shades
of grays,
composing depth,
softening landscape.
MIST IS…
a million
dandelions flooding the sky,
a softened
surfing cloud,
a smoky
blanket obscuring fields,
dispersed
where roads cut through.
Rose
Lefebvre
They're all great. I think my favorite is The Mist. I remember being told to write a nursery rhyme, using creative words, in my creative writing class. I chose Little Miss Muffet. Forget the poem I wrote, but do remember using the word alacrity. My favorite class. Lynnette
ReplyDeleteI especially like " the laughing,spinning, dizzy Rollercoaster for leaves and twigs, a merry-go-round for daring frogs."
ReplyDeleteWell done.
ReplyDeleteGlad to see you are posting some of your poems, Rose. That must mean you're feeling better. BTW, enjoyed the poems. ~ Alice
ReplyDeleteBeautifully ispiring, Rose. Missing your presence among us.
ReplyDeleteOrice
Rose...I comment but never goes through...but I love that you are always "stetching" and your imagery is beautiful. I hope you write two or three poems or thoughts for the church Christmas devotions...short about 15. :)
ReplyDeleteRuth.
"A million dandelions flooding the sky"...Wow! I can see that describing mist so well! JK
ReplyDeleteThese were all great, but the long poem about 2 weeks ago should be published. You are a poet.Lowell
ReplyDeleteVery good!
ReplyDeleteYour writing is beautiful!
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful and lyrical, Rose! You paint pictures with your lovely words! xx K
ReplyDeleteExcellent poems. You've shown me whirlpools and mist in ways I have never seen them before.
ReplyDeleteThanks,
Ron
My favourite one is the last one whose first verse seems so spot on to describe mist.
ReplyDeleteI like these. very well done. Sharon
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